Thread:Murder the Clown/@comment-27855893-20180119235818/@comment-28171460-20180124153732

Alright, Ernesto, I revised the plot and posted it.

The only recurring problem in your writing was that you often tried to make sentences a little too complex. I had to break them into shorter, more clear sentences.

Other than that, the summary was pretty good. Wasn't too many words.