Thread:BatmanOfEarthOne/@comment-28171460-20181016235016/@comment-28171460-20181105011021

Quick note: if you have a rewritebox, normally, you'd leave your writing there until it's been reviewed. That way it can be proofread before being added to an article.

Also, two small critiques:
 * Using "then" in the middle of a sentence usually isn't necessary.
 * You only put a comma before the word "and" if the second part of the sentence has states the subject
 * Correct: He went to the store, and he ate.
 * Correct: He went to the store and ate.
 * Inorrect: He went to the store, and ate.