Thread:ErnestoCabral2016/@comment-31910723-20180206132116/@comment-28171460-20180208050416

Murder, you are going to need to seriously rework the plot of My Best Friend Is Invisible. You have the order of a bunch of things wrong.


 * After Sammy closes the window, his best friend [...] Sammy closes the window and goes to sleep.

Does he close it before or after?
 * After Mr. Jacobs leaves the room, Roxanne suggests doing a report about Hedge House, an old, abandoned house on the block.

No she doesn't. I checked the book, and she does that in chapter 12, which is much later in the book (in a similar scene).