Thread:GoosebumpsArt/@comment-26862374-20171103234257/@comment-28171460-20171105212926


 * >Explained what I'm referring to when I said, "It" why would I refer to Carly Beth as, "It", I'm not stupid!

...0 to 100 real' fast...

Aside from needing commas, the sentence was fine as it was.


 * Original: "In The Haunted Mask, the protagonist, Carly Beth Caldwell, puts on the Haunted Mask"

Now, this is what you wrote:


 * Nick's: "In The Haunted Mask, the protagonist of its book, Carly Beth Caldwell  puts on the Haunted Mask"

Whether or not it was intentional, "its" seems to refer to Carly Beth. The titular Haunted Mask wasn't established to be the subject of the sentence, so using a pronoun is rather ambiguous.