Thread:Murder the Clown/@comment-27855893-20180119235818/@comment-27855893-20180124205323

>Alright, Ernesto, I revised the plot and posted it.

Thank you  so much!

>The only recurring problem in your writing was that you often tried to make sentences a little too complex. I had to break them into shorter, more clear sentences.

Oops, sorry. I will try to make them less complex the next time.

>Other than that, the summary was pretty good. Wasn't too many words.

Thanks!

Now, the Welcome to Dead House and ''Say Cheese and Die! ''plots need an new plot or are they fine how are they?