Thread:Murder the Clown/@comment-27855893-20180119235818/@comment-28171460-20180127050453

From rewrite page:


 * >Among the guests are his younger brother, Noah - nicknamed Lefty because he is left-handed -, his best friend Zack - who wears a strange hairstyle -, and his friends Erin - whose voice is sharp - and April - an extremely shy girl -.

This is a really rough sentence to read. This could easily be 4 separate sentences.

My try:


 * Among the guests are Noah "Lefty" Thompson, Zack, Erin, and April. Noah is Max's brother, and he is called Lefty because he is left-handed. Zack is Max's best friend, and he has a strange hairstyle. Erin is very verbose, and April is incredibly shy.